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Learning To Write Fiction — Some Books

27 Monday Jul 2015

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Grammar, prose, Writing

I feel uncomfortable as I begin this post. I do not consider myself an expert or even good at writing fiction. On one hand I know this is a sentiment most writers feel, yet on the other hand, I have only been writing fiction for five years. I have written much non-fiction: management consulting reports, some IT technical writing such as manuals, some minor web content, and of course hundreds of hours worth of diabetes, nutrition, social, and political debate in forums and various online outlets. I estimate I have written 2.5 to 3.0 million words since 2006. But quantity does not mean quality. If you do not actively learn theory, assess your own writing, and learn from your mistakes, you will not advance. This post is about theory and where to find it. Where I’ve found it.

There are several aspects to writing. A writer needs to know grammar (I will not debate this) and sound grammar is ubiquitous to all writing. The set of techniques needed to write a novel is different from the techniques to write a short story, yet there are similarities besides the variances, and variations besides the assumed. One cannot say “these are the rules.” And then, perhaps outside boundary, are more general, creative elements: sentences, paragraphs, openings, scenes, closings, the give and take sine wave scene-sequel construct, motivation, routine, and a host of technique living somewhere between grammar, form, and end product.

These are simply the books that have helped me become a better writer. They are not about technique for writing stories. I don’t give you scene, plot, or story element theory, the Hero’s Journey for example. These books are about writing. I begin at the basics and move into more advanced topics. I fear my explanations will be thin. Get copies and read them yourself!

Painless Writing Studying grammar is difficult. Often we do not know our own weaknesses — the blind leading the blind — and we need help. Strausser leads you through the relevant basics that will improve your writing. It is a timeless book, and I plan on re-reading it soon. five

 Writing Well: The Essential Guide The entire book is worthy, but the section I found most useful was Tredinnik’s discussion on sentence types. 13 total with hints on usage. If you don’t know what a triadic sentence is, then you may need this book. four

How to Write a Sentence: And How to Read One Stanley Fish is an unbearable blowhard, yet I found this book most fascinating. There are perhaps a half-dozen important lessons in this book that every writer must know. I am sure a lengthy blog post could cover them all, yet the writer in me says this is where the real writer needs to work. Work through this book and I guarantee you will be a notch above 90% of all other writers; though neither of us will be able to explain exactly why. five

Reading Like a Writer: A Guide for People Who Love Books and for Those Who Want to Write Them This is not a detailed how-to book but a learn-by-example book. Many have criticized it. Her chapter on dialogue is priceless! Those who persevere through this book will be the stronger writers. five

Self-Editing for Fiction Writers: How to Edit Yourself Into Print This is as much a book on how to write as how to edit — two sides of the same coin. Show don’t tell, dialogue, narrative, point of view, proportion, voice, sophistication, and more. This book is a gold mine for the new writer and a  useful refresher for all writers. I will read it again more than once. five

Word Painting: A Guide to Writing More Descriptively Who knew there was so much to think about when describing something? A fantastic exploration. This is somewhat a reference book and is useful to review when stuck writing description. If you think description is simply finding words to describe, you are so wrong! *grin*  five

Attack of the Copula Spiders: Essays on Writing If was limited to one craft book, it would be Douglas Glover’s. This collection of essays is rich and deep, a lifetime of knowledge packed into not-easy-to-extract-and-assimilate narrative. The “Drama of Grammar” alone is worth the price of the book. Google ‘Glover but construction’ for hints and what this contains. I plan on pass #2 sometime soon.

How Fiction Works This is not a how-to book. Subjects such as plot, characterization, dialogue etc. are not covered. This book is about lubrication and engineering, not design. How come writing works so well? What are those gears turning inside that box really doing? What kind of grease does that writer use? When I hear two workshop leaders, a poet and an eminent Canadian author (Lisa Moore) recommend this book, I pay attention. Read it with an open mind; it will pay dividends. five

Alert!

22 Wednesday Jul 2015

Posted by John Hanson in Poetry

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Blue, Fountain Pen, Gold, Green, Ink, Phallus, Red

Prompt: ‘Alert’  ***

I have this pen that writes fine lines,
A joy to use, especially with blues,
The color of business, the tone of authority,
A clear message without moody interference,
Is not a green or any combination thereof.
Confidence imparted by turquoise ink is shaky at best.
And reds?
I don’t let the color of whores near this gold-tipped phallus
I am not ready to alert the world that my thoughts are impure.

TWSBI Micarta

Gold-tipped Phallus

*** A Poetic Asides prompt, not a Public Service Warning!

Novel Update

21 Tuesday Jul 2015

Posted by John Hanson in Books, Editing, NaNoWriMo, novel, Prose, Reading, Writing

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2017, Canada 150, editing, novel, Writing

I don’t say much about my writing on this blog. I’ve written much but have said little. Meet me for a coffee, and I will talk your ear off. There is too much to write about, and I’ll be honest, I don’t really know what I am doing. *grin*

2012 Novel

I have received feedback from 5 of my 8 beta readers. It ranges from apathetic to, “you probably need to have a real editor help you through the next steps. I’d send it to an agent now.” My three remaining readers are not so much proofers or editors but audience feedback. I touch areas, and these readers live in those areas. It is prodding the sleeping lion with a short stick.

2012 is currently sitting idle and will remain so for the foreseeable future.

2010 Novel

This story keeps creeping into my head. It is probably because the inspiration for it came from an apartment in the building directly across from our apartment (been here just over a year.) The story has issues, and I don’t know if I am ready to tackle them. I do like it, though, and will have to put serious thought into a plan.

2013 Novel

No plans to take this on. It might have potential, but there is nothing particularly compelling about it.

2014 Novel

This is a sequel to 2012. As with 2012, it addresses important issues that have never before been covered in a novel, and it needs to get out there. *Damn you 2017!

2015 Novel

I am currently trying some ideas out for the next NaNoWrimo. My mind hoards images and inspiration. A few of them are colliding: magical realism, additive sentence style, satire, immigration and emigration (I descend from immigrants and I are an expat), the American Revolution, Vermont dress-code and hairstyles, and the history of my current city a.k.a. The Loyalist City. There is still something missing, and I don’t know what it is. Yes I do, a story.

The Manatee

I am writing a few satirical articles for the Award Winning online blog. My stories.

2011 Novel

I have decided to re-write 2011 and this is where my current fiction-writing efforts are focused. The reason is simple and pressing: this story needs to be published in 2017.

I have overcome some serious flaws in my writing. I still write conversationally, but I am much better at using active verbs. I used to write passive sentences habitually, and I somehow developed the habit of overusing stage management verbs. Copulas have also been a problem, but no as bad as the other issues. A focus on editing has done wonders over these past five years, my reading pace and the quality of my analysis has picked up, and I am seeing the bigger pictures: conflict, character, imagery, theme, etc. My writing feels tighter when I read it back to myself.

I sat down with Mr. 2011 sometime this winter or spring. Its prose was dreadful. Not all of it, but much of it was filled with stage management, filtering verbs – she thinks, sees, feels, and wants. *gag* The scenes had little purpose except for getting from A to B (as one has to do in travel stories), and it was loose. It was more than loose, it was wobbly. It was bloody awful. But as I said, the story needs to be published in 2017.

2017 is Canada’s 150th birthday. It promises to be a huge year in Canada. If you have a Canadian novel — a novel written by a Canadian, set in Canada, and about Canada, this year could be a gold mine. You’d be a fool to pass it by. My 2011 story is about a cross-Canada tour. It is political, tactile, thematic, and in the end, celebratory. I say this honestly and not because I want to sell a million copies: my 2011 story is the perfect Canadian read for 2017. I began writing it long before I realize the significance of 2017, so I will claim it is an honest novel and not manufactured to take advantage of the birthday. I am also encouraged that the people I tell the story outline to all agree — this story needs to be published in 2017!

This morning I finished re-writing up to page 182 of 333, double-spaced Word 2007. 127k words at the moment. I have much left to do. The next step is to edit the belly-of-the-whale scene, the center of the story marking the return home, virtually speaking. The scene takes place on parliament hill during Canada Day celebrations, and I have spent much time at it. This edit will be more a line edit but also to add in elements to make it align with the story and themes, if it doesn’t already, if it would help. The scene has to stay pretty much as it is though. It is a darling that will never be killed by my hands. Without giving too much away, let’s just say the Don Cherry Seven Second Delay makes an appearance.

I have struggled getting this far. I still may re-write PEI and NS. NF and NB are sitting well with me. Québec was a struggle — isn’t it always? — but some research and some deep thought have helped me straighten it. My editor — if you are an editor, I need you! — will have fun with Québec. I left Québec very happy, and I think Québec is very happy I left it.

I entered Ontario a couple of weeks ago distraught. It was some of the worst prose I have ever put on a page. I cut quite a bit of it, yet the basic story needed to remain — again the A to B thing and a need for a setup of the belly-of-the-whale scene. I pondered my root story and my themes, tried a few things, discussed a few ideas with fellow writers, reminisced about certain activities in my past from my time living in Ottawa, and I have crafted some scenes that I now really like. I laugh just thinking about them. And I have to say, this will be a fun, summer read. It is not light and fluffy. It is not an airhead read. It is simple prose, and technically, it is an easy read, but I ask important questions most of us may need to think about.

There are groups of people that will disdain this story — the clowns and the jokers. I acknowledge that, and I am sorry, but there is nothing I can do for you but smile and wave.

Where to from here?

There are big questions surrounding this story:

  • is my writing really tight enough?
  • is the story tight enough?
  • does the story really need to be published in 2017?
  • do I invest time in beta readers?
  • do I query an agent, a mid-level publisher, or go it alone?

I only have two “knows” at the moment. 1. This draft will be completed by the end of August, and 2. Martin(1) will edit it(2) during that first week of September. He doesn’t know his schedule yet 😉

2017 arrives in 17 months! I have to get this to an agent, sign a deal, and get a publishing deal all during September. Self-publishing might be the only way this thing gets out on time, and I hate that thought. I disdain self-publishing for its deigning of quality.

(1)Martin Wightman is a journalist and copy editor at NB News who has recently started writing a regular science column for the Telegraph Journal (protected by pay-wall,) a freelancer, and a song writer (I think). He is also a friend who has edited a few of my pieces, tough but encouraging .
(2)I love working with editors 😉

If you are an agent or publisher looking for that perfect, Canadian novel for 2017. Please contact me. Save us both some time and effort. 😉

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The Tax Offensive Starts On Tuesday July 14, 2015

12 Sunday Jul 2015

Posted by John Hanson in Literary

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On Tuesday July 14, a lawsuit will be launched by about a dozen people against the U.S. Treasury, IRS (ironically, this stands for the Internal Revenue Service), and U.S. Financial Crimes Enforcement Network. The suit is being launched by expatriates as well as Rand Paul. Hopefully it will generate media attention. Of course some of the coverage will be wrong, likely slanted by ignorance, and some of it will be sparse. I’d love to see some serious debate on CNN and FOX News with all the necessary pundits. I don’t expect it to go that far, yet, but this is only the first of many law suits being lined up, including one Canadian suit against the Canadian government.

I am telling you this because it may get messy. I may write something I am not proud of. It has happened before, and Tuesday may become even more intense. Many American “homelanders” are ignorant and uncaring of expatriate tax woes. They are complex issues with a long history, and most Americans judge them with their patriotic blinders. I cannot get upset at them for their reactions, but when they continue to discount my argument even after pages and pages of fact, I tend to get a little upset. I am cleaning the heavy artillery for an onslaught against the ignorant.

Another indication of the seriousness of these taxation issues: A month ago I met with the American Consulate in Halifax to let them know I was relinquishing my American citizenship. Five days prior, I was asked if I’d be interested in having a major network’s “News” show (think 60 Minutes) tag along with me. Record numbers of Americans are booking such appointments, and this program wanted to know if I would be interested in having a camera crew tag along with me. We determined I was not the candidate as I have lived abroad 45 years, have no intention of returning to the United States, and I was not torn up about leaving. And I am not. As soon as the IRS leaves me alone and sends me my Certificate of Loss Of Nationality (stupid concept) I will be most relieved to be gone. The point is some of the major news media are paying attention.

The basic problem we expatriates face is the US has kept its 153 year old tax strategy to control tax cheating by people moving money outside of the country. Most countries have chosen the logical approach: they tax money as it leaves the country (resident-based taxation, RBT). The US has chosen to tax its citizens wherever they live (citizen-based taxation, CBT).

CBT causes many problems, too many to discuss in detail. But the US’s practices have raised the following concerns:

  • CBT taxes foreign economies. Every dollar we pay is a dollar that drops the American debt and raises foreign debt. A person working in Canada for a Canadian institution who invests in a Canadian home, RRSPs, mutual funds, or race horses, has no logical allegiance to the IRS.
  • The IRS does not recognize the same tax savings devices as other countries do. The big example is private homes. The IRS taxes capital gains on the sale of private homes where Canada and many other countries do not. The IRS taxed Boris Johnson, the mayor of London UK, over $100,000 on the sale of his home. He of course called it outrageous. A key difference is the IRS allows mortgage interest and property tax deductions; while Canada and other countries do not.
  • Many American tax laws are protectionist. For example, investing in stocks and mutual funds is looked on favorably, if you live in the US and buy US shares. If you buy foreign shares, these are treated as passive foreign investments or PFICs and are taxed at the highest rates (39.9%) and can be taxed as high as 50% (requires a tax lawyer to explain this shit).
  • About 50% of taxpayers are in private pension plans through their employer. The IRS only recognizes such plans if they are American plans. So all American expatriates working for Bell Canada Enterprises not only are not allowed to deduct their pension contributions from their American income, not only do the plans also do not grow tax free, but such plans are technically considered PFICs and taxed at 39.9% to 50%. It is mind bogglingly stupid, yet there are more examples.
  • We file a FBAR report which is a list of all our accounts, their balances, and the other signing authorities. This invades my privacy and places the burden of proof on me.
  • FBAR penalties are extreme. If I refuse to file, I get slapped with a $10,000 penalty per account plus 50% of the account’s balance for a maximum of three years. Omitting a $25,000 RRSP could cost me $105,000 in penalties; which have been upheld by American courts.
  • FBAR invades my non-American family’s privacy as some of my accounts have been shared by my spouse and my children.
  • FBAR invades the privacy of a non-profit organization I have signing authority with. If I didn’t relinquish my citizenship, I couldn’t ethically retain this duty. I have probably broken my professional accounting ethics guidelines already, but what can I do?
  • Lastly a new law called FATCA is now in place, and this is what Tuesday’s lawsuit addresses. FATCA requires all foreign financial institutions to submit the financial information of all American Persons (similar to the self-reported FBAR report) or have 30% of all their American transactions withheld. This program combined with recent pursuit of several foreign banks for aiding and abetting American tax cheaters to the tune of billions of dollars, has riled foreign banks around the world:
    • Americans are being denied bank accounts and mortgages
    • Existing accounts are being closed
    • Some long term companies are facing difficulties conducting day to day business and signing new contracts with major corporations

Basically the United States has bullied the rest of the financial world and American citizens and businesses (estimated at one million) are taking it on the chin. Canada has not seen these problems, likely because our relationship with the US is so close. Americans in France, Switzerland, Southeast Asia, and other nations are being forced to renounce or relinquish their citizenships if they want to remain.

I am not intimate with the first lawsuit, but it seems to focus on what might be termed a technicality. Treaties and taxation changes require Senate approval. The suit claims the  more than 100 IGAs (Inter Governmental Agreements) the US has signed with other countries are full-fledged treaties, and since Senate approval was not sought, they are null and void. Such arguments don’t seem to matter anymore though. The Obamacare tax failed a similar argument, and President Obama has run executive orders through that probably should have been voted on. Yes, there are many issues involved, and I do not want to get into them. Even if this suit fails, hopefully the media will be woken up to our plights and other, more serious lawsuits will garner even more coverage. There are a number of issues at play here, and a single, all encompassing lawsuit seems unlikely, especially given Cook Vs. Tait failed in 1924.

I firmly believe CBT needs to die. It is wrong on all levels. It would be best of Congress and the president actively discussed this issues and put forward new and better RBT laws, but we cannot wait. Peoples’ financial lives are in Danger. We need action yesterday, and if that means billions of dollars of hidden offshore money goes free, then so be it. We cannot stand for Americans being hurt like this. On Tuesday I and other American expatriates and former expatriates will be bringing out the big guns. You may not want to read my FaceBook timeline on Tuesday.

If you are media and you want intelligent opinion, I know people who can give it. 😉

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